diesel - 30 Nov 2002 02:30 am
Post subject: lies are transparent
don't want your admiration
wanna be modest in all accord
rise above the rest unnoticed
you're in freefall - i'm your ripcord
drop the infallible meat
which feeds the hungry
and understand lies are transparent -
i can see right through you all.
Amadeus - 30 Nov 2002 09:15 am
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Nice one
Although perhaps something earlier in the poem needs to rhyme with all to make it flow better
diesel - 30 Nov 2002 11:40 am
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rhyme is over-rated
td yuy - 03 Dec 2002 09:52 am
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nice
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